Love Out Of Lust Series

Wednesday, July 12, 2017

My Response To The Reviewer About Allison In Wonderland

It’s been a while since I’ve blogged on here, but today I’m going to talk about a reviewer that gave me a bad review on Goodreads.

Well, to begin, reviewers are all based on opinions, but what I’ve also learned that there are some people that thrive on giving bad reviews, and some that are just plain difficult to please. At least, I’m comfortable to say that this book was purchased, but it wasn’t posted on Amazon, nor Barnes & Noble or Kobo; surprisingly not on Smashwords either. However, this reviewer left a one-star
review on Goodreads that immediately stunned me.

The sex/rape was well-written but it was the most sexist and stereotypical book I've ever read. Nearly every character was the same. If you just want pure smut, I recommend it. If you are looking for something more than "tits" and "cocks" on nearly every page, though, I highly recommend something else.

I won’t disclose her name, but you can find the one-star review on Goodreads. She stated that the erotic tale, Allison In Wonderland, was a rape/sex story. To begin, all scenes have consensual content. There was a scene in the story I did worry, where the Red Queen in Chapter Ten had sex with a man against his will, but it was very short-lived. My intention is not to promote rape. I abhor those kind of people, and people who write about rape fantasies; in addition to people who like writing dubious content. The sex scene was already in progress, where the Red Queen was draining his life, as the man in the story pleaded. A little trivia there: I did question the segment I wrote, but I knew in my heart my intention was not to condone rape.

I can explain in my story, and tell it vividly without looking through. I’m the author, and I should know my work. The character I created, Lord Knave, is an evil character. He is the Red Queen’s right-hand man. One thing crossed my mind, in Chapter Nine, where I didn’t want to continue a scene where I believe it could lead to something dubious.

I’ll explain the scene: In Chapter Nine, Jessica, the White Rabbit, was captured and taken down to the dungeon, where she was tied and bound among two other women. Lord Knave had intentions of killing Jessica and the women through his sexual activity, because he inhibited the power of the Incubus. Jessica, even though she was defeated and ready to meet her fate, told Lord Knave to do whatever he wanted to her, but Lord Knave spared her to take the other women next to her. I designed Lord Knave to be a maniacal man; very sadistic. When he chose his next victim, I did not explicit sexual acts, since I knew where this went. In fact, I used the point of view on Jessica, where she closed her eyes, thus giving me the opportunity to close out the scene. The victims that were tied in the story said no, but I never went on describing the sexual acts. I just ended the scene to move on to the next scene.

Rape is a serious thing; not to be looked at lightly. I’ve looked down on authors who used rape fantasies in their stories. When I ran my site, AfterDark Online, I didn’t allow story that contained rape. The word ‘no means no’. I ask other readers to see for themselves where I was going in the story. I needed to be very creative, and this was the first time I ever wrote a story that wasn’t contemporary. I was writing an adult twist to Alice In Wonderland, and I wanted to create a something different than what other authors had created. I wanted to create something of my own, and entertain the reader. My intention of the story was to give to one die-hard fan a real good story of Allison In Wonderland, and share my work to others, entertain and arouse them. Unfortunately, I can’t please everyone as an author.

To the reviewer: If you hate sex scenes in the story then why do you read erotica? I will question to you why, but you are free to do whatever you choose. I remembered when you said that I wrote too many sex scenes in the story, where you did say the story was well-written, but failed to mention I wrote a plot. I will explain to my readers, that is what I like to write. I will not apologize for writing Allison In Wonderland.

I guess you’ve never read any of my other books, which they’re all consensual, and yes, contains lots of sex scenes, but the purpose are for the female readers. I’m a male author who’s been writing erotic romance for over seven years, and what got me into it was from a male author who wrote a sex story in 2010 with no plot, using derogatory languages. I didn’t want to be that author. I wanted to be an author that wrote sensuality, romance, and heavy eroticism. I don’t aim for realism, because there are too many authors that do that, and I feel the world is filled with lots of realism already; people want to escape and that’s what I give them. I write erotica for my fans – the fans I established over the years. I have a small fan base, and yeah, I’m not a best-selling author, but I can live with that. I appreciate readers that love my work and the faithful fans after that. I’m not a typical male author who just writes porn-no-plot. I’m sorry that you didn’t find Allison In Wonderland entertaining, but I’m not sorry that I wrote it. I’m proud of how far it has gone, and I’m grateful of the good reviews I received from others besides you. I’m also happy to hear it’s more popular than any of the other books I’ve written, and they were read by female readers.

What I write? You may say smut. I can live with that. I love sex. I enjoy it too, and I also love romance, and I write about it. I’m a happily married man to a beautiful woman for over twelve years. What does she think of my writing? She’s the most supportive person ever. She’s even proud of me that I’m publishing books, and even maintaining the love and passion for what I do. I even ask her for advice, and yeah, even though she doesn’t read my work she has a dirty mind, but reading erotic books isn’t her forte, and that’s just a personal preference. And she is very encouraging for me to make something for myself.

By the way, while I’m on the subject that I write sex, I not only write scenes that involves a man and a woman having sex in nearly every chapter, but I write gay sex scenes, bisexual sex scenes, transgendered sex scenes, I also write BDSM, and I love writing ménage scenes. I’m a man that writes from the heart, and also writes for my fans. It’s okay for you to assume things about me, and tell others not to read my work. I can tolerate people that make assumptions about me. All I want to say to a reviewer like you is… thank you. Thank you for your disapproval. I can live with that.


  1. Some people are just determined to entertain themselves when reviewing. I am as vanilla as they come, but keep an open mind and heart to percieve truths an author shares with me. I can choose to read, or not, anything. I am also a grown-up with sophisticated ability to read out of my personal comfort zone

  2. I was the reviewer. I had said that the sex-scenes were well-written. I did not mean to use "smut" as a derogatory term, and I really did mean it when I wrote in the review that people who want to read erotica purely for the sexual aspect really should read this; my recommendation was not meant to be sarcastic and I hope that you didn't take it this way. The reason I read your story was because the concept was highly interesting. I love retellings and I enjoy reading erotica, but in my opinion (which every reviewer is entitled to), the story was sacrificed to the sex.
    I have a star system, as I'm sure most others do. My intention as a reviewer is never to attack the author as you seem to have taken it; I review books that I read so other readers will have just one more opinion to consider when deciding whether or not to read a book. You have other 5-star reviews from people who loved it. I'm just one reviewer who didn't.

  3. And I didn't leave that review anywhere else except goodreads for a reason. I typically don't post reviews on Amazon unless it's to recommend them (which is where I bought your book). Also, I did not want to write a negative review on my blog and draw attention to it in a bad light because, again, it's just my opinion. However, goodreads is where I'm most open with writing quick reviews and rating books.
    I hope that you understand better now that my intention was in no way to insult you as a person. I'm in awe of any author who has the courage to write and publish books for others to read. One bad review doesn't make you a bad author, clearly: you have support from others, like the person who commented before me. It just means that this one reader didn't care for it. One reader in a whole world of readers means nothing. There will be plenty more to read it who will love it or hate it, but I really hope that you don't take future bad reviews (if there are any) personally.

  4. When you give a review of any book you just read, your choice of words define who you are, and how serious people will to take you as a reviewer. I would know, I used to do a lot of reviews, and I still do to this. I’ve been reviewing books long before you were coming up on the scene, and your choice of words will determine whether to be taken as a respectable reviewer or just someone looking for attention. I have some advice, and better a few advices to give you if you want to be taken seriously, because I’ve read your reviews when you give a low star, and despite you reviewing system you’ll need some improvements.

    1. Be constructive. It’s okay to be an honest reviewer, but if you’re not giving any constructive advice to help the author improve then people won’t take you very seriously. Your words carry power, and how you sue it, defines who you are

    2. Avoid being over-opinionated and nitpicking. I’ve read your reviews on your blog, and when you give a bad review you pick out the things that bother you very much. It’s more like you get too deep into the story and little things bother you. When you nitpick on a particular phrase or action in the story, it not only tells others that you have issues with the author, but also with yourself. There are going to be things you don’t agree with or little scene you may not like, but when you nitpick you’ll stay too over-opinionated that it’s hard to take you seriously.

    3. Remember, it’s fiction. Enjoy it. Don’t get too overwhelmed about the way the story went; avoid looking for realism. Unless you’re reading an autobiography, remember it’s just fiction. A handful of reviewers will acknowledge that, but there are a few who need to be reminded over and over again that the story is not true, and the author has to be creative the best they can in creating a story. Avoid getting too deep into the story; no matter how much you like it or hate it.

    4. Be professional, or at least cordial. In the world of literature, respect comes from admiration or disdain. Choose your words carefully. Good luck in the future.

    1. I am sending a message to you on goodreads because I don't wish to post my opinion on your public blog and I hope you understand why.

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